Archive | February, 2012

Let Autumn Bleed Her Beauty (Bleeding Autumn), an original poem

28 Feb

As autumn trees bleed, suffer, and die —

We marvel in their beauty,

Thinking naught of desperate survival

And silent, stone-cold death.

Autumn bleeds its beauty,

The crisp, fresh, innocent youth is gone,

Making way for the old and the strong,

The strong-willed and strong-hearted,

The ancient, bloody, and dead.

How cruel it is, for beauty

To be gained and seen only in death.

Their royal robes of green,

By cruel frost and wind are

Cast off and burned,

Ripped and tattered,

Freckled and splattered,

With red gouts of blood,

Crimson tears of living sacrifice…

Condemned to their one last

Dance with the devil.

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An original poem, by Tiffany Huang.

~~ Commentary ~~

This poem was supposed to end at the “Crimson tears of living sacrifice”, but then I wanted to talk about when the leaves are cast off and fall off the tree, all they are given is one last dance, with the devil, and in their case, the wind, as they fall.

I don’t know if it was clear, and usually I really don’t like explaining my poems, but I feel like this one was kind of unclear and it could be interpreted differently in a way I didn’t want it to be, because “Dance with the devil” is such a cliche, that I don’t want it to ruin the ending. Is there something else that could express the fall to death better?

I wanted to put in things like “Spiral of death” or “naked but clothed in blood” or something like that… but I couldn’t fit it in there.

If you like it without the last two lines, tell me.

Which one do you prefer? I personally think it’s more powerful and the imagery is more strong if I end with the “Crimson tears” and “living sacrifice” part, but

I like how I’m writing this when it’s not even Autumn, or close to Autumn. Is it even Spring yet? Hmm. I guess I’m just morbid and thinking of death all year round, and I just can’t get my mind to acknowledge Spring! Ha, ha.

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28 Feb

What a creative and amazingly adorable music video! ❤

Love the art.

Seems like it’s quite difficult, living in a 2D world.

28 Feb

Who would have thought forever could be severed by a sharp knife?

Well, I’ve had enough time.

28 Feb

“Savin’ Me”
Prison gates won’t open up for me
On these hands and knees I’m crawlin’
Oh, I reach for you
Well I’m terrified of these four walls
These iron bars can’t hold my soul in
All I need is you
Come please I’m callin’
And oh I scream for you
Hurry I’m fallin’, I’m fallin’

Show me what it’s like
To be the last one standing
And teach me wrong from right
And I’ll show you what I can be
Say it for me
Say it to me
And I’ll leave this life behind me
Say it if it’s worth saving me

Heaven’s gates won’t open up for me
With these broken wings I’m fallin’
And all I see is you
These city walls ain’t got no love for me
I’m on the ledge of the eighteenth story
And oh I scream for you
Come please I’m callin’
And all I need from you
Hurry I’m fallin’, I’m fallin’

All I need is you
Come please I’m callin’
And oh, I scream for you
Hurry I’m fallin’, I’m fallin’, I’m fallin’

Cannons.

28 Feb

It’s falling from the clouds,
A strange and lovely sound…
I hear it in the thunder and the rain.
It’s ringing in the skies like cannons in the night
The music of the Universe plays.

Beautiful and free
The song of galaxies
Reaching far beyond the milky way.

 

28 Feb

Hush, now, let’s go quiet to the park
Where it first started…
Cool night, us lying in the dark,
I felt my heart
Was trying to find the place for you to stay…
A place where I feel safe.

Anything we have known, anything we’ve forgotten
In the rain, in the dark we’ll lay
In your arms, in your arms I’ll stay
Anything we have known, anything we’ve forgotten
In the rain, in the dark we’ll lay
In your arms, in your arms I’ll stay

Take my hand
Let’s go into the trees
Behind the branches
Falling on our knees
I remember feeling like this part of us will never change

Follow me,
We both know the way
It’s always been the same

In your arms I’ll stay.

28 Feb

How far is the east from the west?

Where do they meet and overlap?